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IP:
Different aproach...but I see you pulled it off nicely. You had some good lines. and some ones you could of worded differently...but they still sounded good.
Your flow was okie..structure was good..this piece i found very more comoplex then your past pieces that i've checked out.
The line quoted by e was fuckin dope...keep that up..and so was this one...
I've Pounded My Revelance. . .
. . . Through The Eyes Who's Ears Have Not Developed
Stinging With My Teachings As The Pen Starts To Swell Up
Dope^^
But basically that was my faverite verse out of them all..you really showed great potential there...keep it up man. i'll be looking out for more of your stuff...peace
If ye got time...peep sommin in my sig...thanks man
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