^ multis and vocab in a battle mean shit...if ya gonna give info give correct info. His lines were a fine length, they dont need to be perfect to have good flow.

first of all drop the // from the end of your lines.. we dont need it. work on ya rhyme scheme, your rhymes are basic and they arent good, like miller and killer. to basic. work on ya punches also and try to include personals in them, make sure you have a good set up and come complex. Read some battles in LLL and you can see what good punches are. learn what is played and what isnt, and see feebles thread also to learn about good personals.

if you have any more problems/questions..feel free to ask

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