Ima knock your dick so far in u can call it a clit/
so sit, and realize this new presentation I spit/
An unexciting opener. You see a nice opener, or a decent one is what keeps the voter wanting to hear more. In this case, an elitest rhymer might read this, and not even give the rest of your verse a chance. But i'm not a person like that, because there is always the chance of a slow start and a great finish.
I may be new to rappin and rhymes, but crack open the Times/
and notice ".snap.", front page, dazzlin minds!/
This isn't a diss of any sort. It's best to keep going for the jugular. Using one's name, icon, sig, or whatever is your best bet in a diss against them.
Lyric's shit is over-played, like rainbow hair-do's/
the only time you 'get involved' is watching Blues Clues!/
a decent punch.
Just admit that your rappin intelligence is oh so artificial/
This niggah blows more men then a referee blows his whistle!/
decent punch. The use of 'Oh So', is kinda corny, no offense.
Its time ta delete this weak elite piece of meat/
superglue his seat and beat this meak lyric~al creat(ure)/
the ending is off. Often in rap, one can cut off words, or pronounce them wrong and get away with it. But in this case, it doesn't seem too nice doing so.

a decent verse though, all in all

Told ya neck I was battlin ya and it was like 'snap!'
You a fake emcee made up of whackness and crap
That first line was nice, it's an opener that'll keep you reading.
Your call stated that you'd waste any who replied
Your anutha kid from Cali, but I doubt your rep West Side
hmmm...Left in the dark on this one. Are you saying he's not from cali, or he doesn't rep it right? not too nice.
Like a drive-by with spit balls, your rap brings no force
You a wannbe textee, from writin ya voice gets hoarse
nice on the spitballs line
My punches all connect, while you gave a decent try
But you must be in the Airforce son, ya punches did fly-bys
uh huh.
Nothin you threw hit and ya verse is completly played
The best punch ya ever threw was..uh...your..um.gay
unsatisfying closer, but your verse will suffice. It is decent over all. I feel like, you felt it was just enough to beat him. I could see iller shit coming from you.

So overall, Lyric i feel got this one, although i wouldn't say he eclipsed snap, but it's a definate win though. I like the format that Snap took though.