Yo this cat wise ways, is prolly older than me, but im sonnin’/
You would think I spit wit a taser, the way my flows stunnin’/
Here to settle this beef once and for all, got tired of runnin/
^this opener is simplistic....your scheme is predictable...you really didn't hit him with an punches here either...
Yo, im on the brink of killin all of suicide inc./
I’ll Blow they brains out, so they cant think/
And leave em on ice, like babies at skate rinks/
^its called filler you might need more prac in Fl before you bust here man...
This crewhopper, got more beef wit dynasty than a triple patty whopper/
,Hes softer than butter like hes betty crocker, im a lyrical jalepeno popper/
Meanin im hot, I put an end to him, so call me iceman the showstopper/
^this had a ok punch in it but the shit just jumped around so much and the last line just sucked.....
Yo You may have beet prophet but I leave you wit lost conscience/
Your names kaos theory and wise ways, Aliases? Stop the nonsense/
^ok personal but everyone knows theyare one in the same...
hes sweeter than the scent of baby powder, like Johnson and johnsons/
he gets Carson to d/r battles, go ahead and turn that down in your responses...
^see how i wrote that last word in there for you with the dots....thats a structure fix cause your shit is fucked....

Called me out like 7 days ago.. Shit.. ya verse must be sweet
Its Heat, Especially after admitting you been writing it all week
^ahhaha nice opener good quote...
Ya rhymes antique.. Ice is throwing punches covered with dust
Plus I already whored you..so you just a lost and forgotten slut
^meh not your best..in fact pretty weak
I'll Eat this emcee.. Fuck it.. I could devour you.. just by nibbling
Ice.. I'll Son ya ass faster than you can say "Prophet's my sibling"
^ooh i like it alot....good personal
You a Top Gun?Shit..I'll Cruise right past you and split ya cabbage
It's like I'm Mel Gibsen.. Tha way Iceman's second best to Maverick
^good wordplay you already got this battle by this line
And For tha first time in History.. you'll actually get merked in text
Iceman187? How dumb can you be? Tha kids reporting his own death
^this is very true this really wasn't a fair battle
Wise Theory just made a break through.. Literally tha Ice went thin
You a Herb? ya green..you reek of wackness..you fit all tha symptoms!
^wow nice ....keep the punches comin man ....
Wtf? I swear this fags retarded.. If I'm not mistaken thats a lame flow
I mean.. damn.. tha fucking dumbass walked straight into my Volcano
^meh your closer was just ok but i felt the middle....

winner ...wise ways...hit this up y'all its a good read and no hate....

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