U Call Yoself Matt-matt//
But If U Meet Me U Be Meetin A Baseball Bat//
weak opening..no structure, no punches
And I Hate To Have To Be So Rude//
But When Im Battlin A Faggit I Have No Choice But To Beat This Dude//
need to have personals...
And U Can Say What U Want//
But When I Lift Up My Shirt U Better Duck Cuz Des Bullets Gona Hurt//
not even very direct...need to target your opponent more
I Anit A Killa//
But U Will Get Merked//
I'll Chop Yo Body Up Then U Will Get Served//
To The Fiends On My Block Where They Like Tha Work//
And The Semi-automatic Left U A Stick Cuz Yo Body Got Jerked//
make sure your structure is good, lines even, it will help your overall flow, and just work on your punches


my flow is so hurtful and KEEN makin you feel awkaward
the last capitalized adjective is your signature backward
okay opener...i can see your elevating
but im not here just to make creative word jumbles
im here to slit your nizzie so deep your throat crumbles
kinda weak personal but your getting the right idea...
ill pull your head back using your own hair
your neck opens up like what you use to spit your wack air
not feeling this one...
i open it up enough to look down your esophagous
seein nothin but female organs during this unofficial autops
would've been good if wordded diff. but it doesn't rhyme
starting to feel guilty cause youre so young or YNG
so i end your suffering, and change your abreviation to RIP
okay closer...

overall: matt took this battle, you both need to work on your punches and get more personal..matt your flow is getting better and your structure just concentrate on getting at your opponent more...YNG, you need to work on your flow and look at some other battles to get examples of what your verse should look like...keep elevatin tho'....peace
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