...you should try writing about something that isn't meaningless garbage.
your flow was okay.
you didn't display wit, complexity, or even any wordplay in any of your lines.
and mascier isn't a word.
go look at some other pieces in the forum, follow their example.
write to a topic, or at least make an attempt at a funny battle rap.

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