it was alright....ok first drop, alot of one-liners,try some better metaphors and stay away from dissing millionaires...write something you know and people can relate to if you're going to tell a story....keep at it, you'll find what works for you.

return the favor as i enjoy the feedback too...let me know what you think. :}-~

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