damn, i think this is the first piece i've read from you here, but damn hopefully it wont be the last.this piece was so well built, everything was dead on, emotion, structure, vocab all of it, but mostly the emotion. all the detail and thought in this piece was what made that emotion so strong. you could tell something bad was going to happen, but still there was a twist, with his brother and all. i loved this.

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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