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..Soft Focus..
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IP:
You have a good sence of structure...but you need to try and make a song about things people are interested in..for instance your life..background...maybe your feelings...cause you rapping about Tu pac isnt very grasping because it isnt lagit..for a newbie your off to a good start...but leave people from mainstreem out of what your writting..just makes for a more interesting read also try and make your lines a linttle longer it might help your imagery and emotion peek out a little more but keep your lines the same lenght like what your doing
keep at it though...peace
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