Thread: Survivin the Streetz
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Old 01-29-04, 06:02 PM   #8
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Decent drop, you had a good rhyme scheme and structer, i think you need to elavate your vocab a little..try and grip the reader a little quicker as well you started off pretty weak...good detail but weak captioning...but keep at it...peace
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