I got to go with IceMan...He had a structure that left a lot to be desired...i don;t like the three lined stanza's...He ahd some cool punches though...I believe Kryo may have quoted them already...A couple of punches made me laugh.
Till Eye Die...You just came out to simple....You had some good personals going but it was mad basic.....I felt the scenario you tried to put out there but they never ended in anything catchy...Be more creative in your thinking...don't just come out and say it...make it funny. Make it hard.