Yo this was good.....Very good wordplay!.....Flow was very consistent an easy to read....had some really good lines in there as well......

Cos in time you’ll find that lines n cracks appear in set cement
And once its crumbled, its only the foundations ya built that are left

I like that line right there....shit was nice......damn if theres anything i could say would be ah..........o yea watch the beginning of your sentences....you started alot of them with "Cos"......really good read i thought. keep doing your thing man! peace