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IP:
very nice...i won't say impressive because i already knew you had skills...dev your piece was almost perfect...the flow was prfectly paced...never had a second to take a breath and stop readin..skiddz some of your lines were stretched but your verse was extremeely effectual at addressign the topic, you never lost sight, dev gto lost in the rhyme a few times..but you kept the rhyme tight and kept defendin your point...the intro and outro are uneccessary...btu that's really up to you...maybe the intro shoudl stay, the outro eh...im not sure, anyway taht's my only real criticism...excellent drop..but like pen said...we're gonna be better..lol
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"..Very nice..Very emotional...real Deep piece..I really enjoyed reading this..there are few good writers on this site..and I think they are good cause simply they write some good shit..but..rarely I enjoy reading a piece..but..this was fantastic..peace.."
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