Actually, This Wasn't Half Bad. . Some Nice Lines. . Albeit Played Ones. . Flow Suffered From The Stretched Bars In The Middle. . Work On Evening Things Out Or Inserting Periods Like I Do For Pauses So The Flow Is Still Seen And Not Lost. . Decent Vocab. . Some Good Multi's. . Maybe More Multi's Next Piece To Help On Flow. . Structure Was Fucked Because Of The Middle Of This Piece. . Topic Of Self Proclaimation/Bragging Is Played, But This Is Your First Drop And You Were Making A Statement. . And Shit Was Decent. . Keep Droppin Man, Only Room For Improvement. Pz.

Poker these niggas got em Folding With Ya
I got all these Kats In My Hand like Holding Wiskers
Jea Dropping Bars like Stolen Snickers
Do a Drive By On ya Frame like im Rolling Pictures
^ ^ Pretty Good Way To Open Up, My Fave Lines Of This Drop. . Even Tho All Lines Are Played, Shit Flowed Good, Shoulda Kept This Tempo The Whole Time.


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^ ^ Hit It Up, Appreciate It.

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