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Old 01-31-04, 06:28 AM   #10
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MuSick rhymes couldn't punch my ass even if I was a punching bag
Rap Battler's use Zoloft to read Musick rhymes are depressing and sad
^thought it was ok... could have been worded better, ok W/play
do da math of da odds 3 plus 15 equals 17
flows get fucked like highschool porno teens
^wasnt very consistant with the bar above... ok, but weak W/P
you fell off and jus have gotten batted out da "RB" stadium
chewed and spat as much as baseball players changing gum
^didnt rhyme... ok meta, but didnt hit too hard
now MuSick instead of resting in piece rest in pieces
photograph your loss in a picture frame to freeze it
^nice multi, ok personal... hit ok...
my ass on da toilet to dump rhymes on your ass
a fresh newb wearing diapers bout to get a rash
^didnt like the rhyming, same word,NO... again the wordplay was quite weak.. hit harder
don't get mad and pissed over a complex diss
now i'm off da toilet and your drenched in shit
^weak closer,...flowed good,, but didnt hit...

The reason why ur girl went astray
Cuz u got fags dippin inside like u was an ashtray
^could have been worded better, and hit harder
Imma man of industry
Ur unknown ur a man of mystery when im finished ur history
^good flow but this is a battle.... punch?
I take it u hate newbies
The rhymes u use to duel me only fuel me to make ur verse literally 'not to be'
^seemed forced
U've been in the sun too long
Ur bein out-done an out-shone it's ur shitty textee verse thats all wrong
^weak punch again....
If i lose its corruption
U must be registered more times than one now bare wiv me im nearly done
^didnt hit,,, be more direct
Now don't go uppin
Cuz if u do then u've made a mistake it should be ur wrists that u cuttin
^weak closer... it should be nice and strong, to finish things up...

all in all.... Ak takes this one, better worddplay, structure and harder hitting punches..... vote=Ak
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