--[Flow]---
Flow was pretty good..i felt that it could have used some more internals but the fluently of it was good...you had some nice complex rhymes in there which inevitably helped.

--[Vocab]--
Vocab was off-the-hook as usual...dunno how many syllables you used per bar..lol, but it was all rlevant not just a series of 10 letter words thrown in to make it look good, some dope shit in there:

"I'm In a Panic Yet Moving So Slow You Wouldn't Notice
Where My Glasses I'm Trying To Put All This Into Focus"

"Please Get Me Out Of Here I Can't Speak Listen To My Soul
People Don't See Things The Way I Do Place Perspective In Control"

--[Concept]--
Liked what you were saying here...you had alot of - dunno how to put it, erm...Relative?, Relational? bars...it just sorta pulled me in and made me wanna read on, takes a good writer to do that.

--[Overall]--
Was a doep piece, one of the best i've seen on Open mic this month...4/5..if you had done anymore like a hook or something it would have probably spoiled it...big props.