yo this peice was exelent, like evryone else said this has alotta imagery and its very emotional. very well written and it sounds real gud out loud!!!

.........favorite part.........


For a pure child you are to the earth
with no evil yet inside you
I promise i'll protect your mind
and let no evil dreams corupt you

that sounds exactly like what a mother would think, around the time when they are first born and she see's her newborn child for the first time!! gud peice!!! keep it up, kant wait 2 c yah next peice!

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