ya spits aint shit, wanna hit and start hatin?
i mean whats DEV? {D}ick {E}nlargement {V}acation?
IM SICKER~THAN~THA~GAME, so you the PICK~OF~THA~LAME,
im startin to wonder whats shorter...YOUR DICK~OR~YA~NAME?
cmon pussy, cmon and push-me swearin an shouting,
ITLL STILL BE OBVIOUS, this battle is like gary colman against yao-ming.
ya shits like a 'LIMP DICK', CUZ EVERYTHIN IS 'HARD~AS~YOU',
cuz you just a 'pussy with beef' like 'lesbian barbeques.'
i aint gunna argue-wit-you, so come back wack,
with an attack of bitch ass battle raps ya sister wrote for you in her math class.
BITCH ILL 'BLAST~THIS-GEEK', havin ya period LASTIN-FOR-WEEKS,
ya HALF ASSED lines aint hard, like unmasculant-cheeks!
THROW A 'PUNCH BACK', like 'quazimoto rhymes', ya HUNCH'S~WACK,
you like the fuckin CHIP AND DALE, the way you MUCH~ON~SACK!
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fix ya struc and dont caplock ya words thats herb shit,or ive heard
anyways 6/10 overall so elavate homie punches werent directed very well
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Its 2004, not 92… yet this kid’s droppin played lines
I wouldn’t mind another time…but half of them are mine
So unless their blind… they've made the association
Good this is only text… and you've got bad pronunciation!
God father in ya sig… don’t make you a playa
White never won the title… So like him you’re a failure
A 147 break I don’t think so… you’re plain snookered
Again its jimmy white that cues… gets a first round knock out
So that last bar don’t rhyme… but you highlight the multi
So we’re even… except JW equals,,, ya Just Worried…
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nice struc and good werdplay overall 8/10
aight well dev had more directed punches and personals
which won him this plus his was more of a battle verse
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vote/Dev
hit my sig dogg dont leave me hangging
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