I'll hand u mah X-ray glasses yo u can 'see-through' clear visions
hellow... over here punk, I'm the one u gotta be dissin'
nice opener, good metaphors, the punch is alright, needed some strength though
aint gonna tell ya that your shitz wack bitch u just need practice
I'm already underground... like dead people speakin' in casketz
alright bar i suppose. Set could a been a little better
thiz kidz over... closed like columbo's last casez
u comin' with 2 pairz, I'm comin' with straight acez
the punchs fell off here, seemin filler ish even with the metaphors
man face it, u got wasted, missbehavin' u sayin' ?
fuck that, I'm just layin' whip-ass to the situation
nice multi, although the punch needed more
now relax, put that squirt gun away, letz keep it lyrical
u gonna lose, no need for miraclez or feelin miserable
eh weak punch, needed more of a connection with the follow through. Sort of weakened the blow
u can cancel your appointement with that shrink
learn how to flow, start by floatin' 'round in the sink...
Eh not much comen out here
*woosh* I said sink, not toilet u dumb-ass bitch
guezz itz like from dust to dust and shit to shit
nice connection with the bars, gives it a little somthing extra. althrough your follow through strength is pretty weak to me
drugz and rap, can't kick it nomore, they turned into daily habbitz
u better get out before u missin' with more shit than radio editz...
nice ending. the follow through seemed alright, set was kind of weak
Over all you had some alright punchs, metaphors were ok, but the personals could have been upped alot more. Your flow was decent but need some improvment.
how you gonna challenge me, kid you don't even rhyme
ur like a high school drop out, you failed english every time
alright starting, good connection to a SET UP and FOLLOW THROUGH.. not many people usin that systems now a days.. the strength was alright
on this mic i'm like a freight train, there's no way that you can stop it
My words tear off dicks so fast i scare Lorainna Bobbit
eh, nice set sort of basic concept though. follow through wasnt much i thought
Oh r u surprised? you should have known my rhymes are tight
You rap like u drag race. . . you cheat and run the red light
LoL nice similie here, the punch could have used a little more though
and every time you still lose....... and don't even try to lie
My technique always kills, in a battle they charge homicide
alright follow through kind of played though, at least to me. could have used a better wording connection though
cause my words cause to much pain, and urs are just spastic
my words choke you up , cover your mouth and nose like plastic
nice bar i thought, strength wasnt really there but a good metaphor
I make it hard to breathe, I laugh cause ur carreer is threw
Its only my 3rd battle, and i'm already better then you
good follow through, nice punch. i thought your set up lacked a little though
I'm the prodigy, remember it and know me
the only time u use the mic is when u practice how to blow me
again good follow through it came off with alright strength.
my name says i'm a child, but please don't let more in
and remember that i'm the one who got u in this forum
kind of a weak punch, but a litle rewording would have improved alot
I rip you like cutter, cause in this rap game i'm the best
But i gotta let you go right now and save some for the rest
weak ending i thought not much of a punch more filler ish
over all your verse had consisant punchs for the most part, although i thought you could have upped on your personals some. decent metaphors in it, nice similies. not a bad verse but could use some improvement.
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