What has Open Mic come to....Your flow was atrocious...and you lacked any significant multies, metaphors, and wordplay...Your subject was same old, gangster style...typical...Your structure needs to be fixed, your bars are stretched and didnt help the flow..and your vocab was below average. You needa straighten up your bars and try to put some multies in your pieces, along with larger vocabulary.
Please return the favour.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...637#post1147637