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virtuso
Your greatest punches were ..erased.. while the rest-were-irrelevant
You'll never elevate like your "skills caught up with the law", just "arrested development"
nice, strong opener

This pest-aint-intelligent but I'll still maim and dangle-this-nerd
A tangle-with-Verb? I should be "stepping in flower beds" the way I "trample-this-herb"
second line kinda played, but not too bad

This tramp-is-absurd, I "get under your skin" to the point I could "dance-with-your-nerves"
Im invading the "corners of your mind", you feel my "hands-on-the-curb"?
nice wordplay, aiight punch

In case you don’t figure-in-time I’ll let you know the kid-is-divine
Serve you like “Baby Backs” at “Chili’s” when I dangle your “rib”-in-your-“spine”
not too bad, second line was nice

You so “gassed” that if you smelled smoke, then most likely your ass might-be-”burning”
Meters “wrapping hair” (rapping here) puts more people to “sleep” than an Afghans’ “nightly-Turban”
oh oh, nice, flow was a lil off to me

Only way you’d ever have “nerves of steel” is with the “shank-through-ya-skin”
I’m taking all categories for voters but at least in boredom-you’ll-win.....
not good for a closer

the multies you used made you punches hit pretty hard, coupled with your wordplay, a very nice verse!!

only thing is some of the lines were a little stretched which made the flow a lil off!!

meters
Stepping to me launches you in the air…an crushes ya flat
Took your advice and looked up……….
…………..……..so I could see what ya sig’s laughing at!
i could see what you was aiming for, could of been worded better

Wanted in on this battle...couldn’t have been more wrong
Because you’re out of the woods when I beat you…….
…………...back to the cunt reside in which you belong!
not too bad, another nice concept

I stepped into this battle vicious..ready to win at all costs
What a surprise it was for me……….
……………………………when at any rate, you lost!
made me laugh, nice flow, an pretty witty

Trying to hang with me…you’re one of the week I ditch
Woke up to check the calendar……
…………………….................and then I sunday bitch!
noice concept, wordplay let you down

Two of my verses should be posted..make it even lyrically
Because you’d have to bite my entire verse…..
………………………………….to get a taste of victory!
shouldn't of said verse twice, was a pretty good punch though

I merked you in this battle…but who really won is blurred
Because I have to hear this bitch squeal…
…………….……..….after I made him a broken record!
again bad wordplay

Running with IJL……and you can’t even step to them
Ya only in that wack crew……
……………….’cuz you couldn’t beat so joined ‘em!
nah, this didn't come off

you shouldn't of used the structure all the way through, there was only a few bars which needed it!!

you concepts were nice, but wordplay let you down, consistancy helps out in battles,
if your wordplay was batter you would of won this battle.
no hate.

my vote - virtuso
harder punches, nicer multies, an consistancy that made his verse strong all the way through!!