I thought it was an alright read in my opinion though I'd say u could do alot better if u took more time with it and I can say that I can sorta relate to this so I thought your imagery was good and u had good content with the whole story aspect of this piece. I think u coulda had some more multi's though and the rhyme scheme seemed sorta basic but it made for an easy read only thing I thought it was lacking really was wordplay. but other then that man it was an alright piece. keep droppin bro peace.

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