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Eye Designs
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IP:
Diverse
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1st bar
My heart's become scathed from past situations unchanged
Regrets influence future decisions,while previous hurt remains
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Dope opener, good imagery..nice flow 4/5
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2nd bar
Inside my mind I relapse, rewinding time like motion pictures
Always falling for the same traps, escaping through written scriptures
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Nice, good imager, flow + emotion 5/5
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3rd bar
Wishing I could go back, edit out every single problematic altercation
But in my head i realize that i'm far past these altered situations
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Good, vocab was good, flow was decent. 3/5
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4th bar
Still i reminisce, screaming internally, so many things left unsaid
Wondering if it could've been different, had i spoken up instead
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Nice, good flow, nice imagery, showed emotion 4/5
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5th bar
And how many more oppurtunites, will i choose to carelessly overlook
Hurt floods my heart overwhelmingly, one regret was all that it took
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Dope.. 4.5/5
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6th bar
I'm still standing defiant, but have become weakend by my lack of action
Trying to progress forward in my life, but steady slipping without traction
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Nice....nice flow, good imagery...4/5
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7th bar
Certain instances left me feeling helpless, spiraling easily out of control
Bearing burdens, being selfless, in order to lift the weight off my soul
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Words can't explain 4/5
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8th bar
As i shed these outer garments, a new being has slowly transformed
Never again shall life surpass me, even if i must deviate from the norm
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Straight could be worded better, 3/5
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9th bar
So as I find function, settle down, and assume my role to play in life
Never stray, defy junction, in order to eliminate all the pain and strife
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Decent imagery, showed effection..3/5
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10th bar
Eyes now filled with acceptance, my actions created these false results
Now, finally fulfilling my repentance, owning up to every one of my faults
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NICE... good way to finish..4/5
Overall... ... 38.5/50
TheUnderRated
Quote:
1st bar
On my back my chest convulsin open heart to the air....
eyes slowly closing, pulsing as i moan in despair...
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Decent, Imagery could use work... 3/5
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2nd bar
put my hand to my chest blood covers my fingers in red...
Release the muscles in my neck..I can feel the hot lead...
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Some what imagery shown...good flow 4/5
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3rd bar
We were just talkin what happened? all this for rappin?
thats what i get for gum flappin and pullin my like i was clappin...
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Played flow, kinda weak 2/5
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4th bar
why did i even have it..scared packin for self protection..
look what it got me a shot straight to the midsection..
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Played, needs work 1/5
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5th bar
not enough energy to speak so i stare blankly at my assailant..
raise a hand to try to stop him but it falls to the pavement...
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Didn't exactly flow, imagery was weak... 2/5
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6th bar
he takes my gun out my coat and points it right at my face...
for a split second i look back on the events to figure out what took place...[quote]
Hmm.. like a soap opra..whats gone happen next? 3/5
[quote]7th bar
"what up bitch"...who a bitch?....you a bitch?.....wha?
"watch what you say motherfucker"..."get that fuckin bitch man"
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???? 1/5
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8th bar
"oh you got a gun".....bet your too pussy to pull IT..c mon bitch pullit..
I put my hand on the handle bout same time i caught the bullet..
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Played also....2/5
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9th bar
I heard a loud sound then again my eyes could see..
I was at heaven's gate i approached and st.peter asked me...
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Straight, some what played 2.5/5
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10th bar
Do you truly believe you deserve a life of everlasting bliss...
In shame I bowed my head as i fell from Grace into the Abyss...
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Imagery was good, flow was decent.. 3/5
Topical skills need work... overall 23.5/50
v/Diverse
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