--[Flow]---
Flow was outragous....reminded me of Immortals in some places, you had a dope rhyme scheme and some dope rhytmical ability, nice internals as well....
--[Vocab]--
Vocab was nice, liked you complex rhymes, really added some depth into the piece...also, you used a good array of terminology to really tell the tale and expose us to the harsh relality that you were puttin' out.
--[Concept]--
Seemed original..don't think i've seen it done before...you executed it brutally...reall capturing the imagry and vision...
"The prize their fighting for, soon clear in sight
.. As the million white cells start veering right ..
Up the felopian tube; as its sides then spread
.. And each sperm looked to fertilise the egg .."
--[Overall]--
One of the better topics and pieces i've witnessed...
4/5....out of curiosity, Are you Baron Mind, just style n' layout is totally similar...
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Originally Posted by Edge
tight, I'm raising another man's son and I could not live with the thought of him in a home.
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^Dawg, thats not a reply.^
anyway...if you have time::
[Behind The Words]