Thread: Baz187 Vs Tenz
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Old 02-02-04, 05:11 PM   #9
VanIllabymidnite
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Here's how I see this.

Flow=Tie. Neither of your flows were well structured, which made them hard to read. I'm not even going to comment on the 2nd flow by Baz. Both of your flows were kind of messed up, work on this and it will make your over all drop better.

Punches=Tie again. You both had about the same number of punches and they both hit about as hard, which wasn't much. Both of you need to work on this as well, a good punch can win you a battle.

Personals=Tenz, I'm giving this to him because I didn't really see any personals from Baz until his second drop which doesn't count. Once again, both of you work on this and it will really improve your drops.

Vocab=Tie again. Both of you used pretty basic vocab, a few well chosen pieces of vocab can really make any drop better. Again work on that and it should help both of you elevate.

Ove all=Tenz, your piece hit a little bit harder, you still need to get to work on your flow and developing your punches and personals and vocab, if you can do this I think you will improve greatly.
Baz, you need to work on all of that stuff as well, but also realize that most of the people on this site think feeding off of the other persons verse is bitch to do, come up with stuff from your own brain and it will be a much better piece, other than that just keep working on other stuff, your second drop had a much better flow and I probably would have given you the win off of that but it was dropped to late.

Vote=Tenz
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