Wow, this was pretty realistic. I can actually imagining this happening somewhere out in the world, in some low-class neighborhood. The mental pictures i get when reading this, just blows the proportion of a rhyme as i know it. The stereotype of rap isnt like this at all, its more like, some poetry, but as you think about it, rap is poetry with a beat. Some lines could have been reworded, but this was pretty good stuff. Keep up the good work. Even though this was an easy read, it still hits deep down (Hits fist on chest). Good job.

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