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Old 02-02-04, 11:14 PM   #2
SMZ
Flyweight
 
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From: Charleston, SC
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Pretty nice, liked your "sicker before" and "liquor to pour" lines particularly. One thing, the difference in line length in some places throws the flow off. Like your "rockin tha booth" and "blockin tha truth" rhyme. Maybe it sounds different when you spit it but from the text it just sounds odd.
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