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Old 02-03-04, 01:23 AM   #19
MichaelCorleone
Flyweight
 
Posts: 151
From: Dallas, TX
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based on what i saw i would give it to kuniva.
i liked the way you stayed with the rhyme the first 2 bars.
a free fine for real i liked that good metaphor with the cowboy line.
good personal about the cpu the last 4 lines did rhyme but no continuity witht the idea.
but it was a good vers none the less.

malice i was liking the verse but i had to implant words to keep it flowing. so vote goes to kuniva. cause her punches were better and hit harder
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