this was a bit different than im used to reading from you...
yeah the flow was on blah blah you always have good flow
i was nicely surprised by some internals and multies that
really put the icing on the cake...one thing is to try to stop
writting about females all the time...you do this a lot
experiment a bit with other types of situations and species lol

vocabulary was for the most part nicely fluctuated and it
didnt make it seem heavy nor light....imagery was ok not your
best but it was still above average for most people in here


all in all i give this a 7/10

lol