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IP:
iight...
Both verses had nasty structure's... Flow was on in Fair's verse... Smilie... your verse had flow... but some bars where stretched out... {every 3 lines}...
Smilie had some good punches... BUT... please stop wiv the CAPITALS... it throws the flow... and annoys me... lol...
You did have alot of multi's... as always... dont know if thats a good thing... but yea... some had punches incorporated into them... A wasnt really feelin your verse...
Fair... You need to sort out your structure... Make it into a solid block of writing... no line gaps... messes flow... and structure {obviously}... you had some good punches... Not many multi's... jus work on it and you will get better...
Overall...
v/ Smilie... His verse was better {only just}... Better punches... Multi's... Structure a suppose... It was obvious that you came half-assed... dont... but you did enough to take this... pz
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