im leaving you infected like a rusted knife in yo skin, you might call yo self a vet but i killed you in this battle so now they gona call you a has been/in lamen terms this battle is for adults and your jus a lil kid, whatever the fuck you got ta say ill still kill you and im about ta close the lid/you say you like women but we all know its tha otha way around/ ull be dropped by the king so jus hand me ma crown/i think killin is a pleasure so dont try ta run/like i know whatcha did las summa theres no need ta rap back its all said and done/i jus vaporized you and your allies, theres no time to fight back just say your godbyes.
^holy shit i don't even wanna read this use vertical structure not horizontal get your shit right son.....DAMNIT.......Ok this was a verse choked full of attempted punches...you had some creative meta4's.....but when i say creative i don't mean good...you need to fix your stretched lines and horizontal structure because it blows and people who have to read through it will hate you.......


Puerto Rican? Get out of this battle site, go and play some baseball,
Hustle you for your money, you don't know the rules, why you 'hitting the 8-ball',
^ok this is a good shot at puertoricans...you racist fuck....
Watch this coward fold more than than a fucking 'burrito',
Whilst I hit him with punches more effective than placebos,
^hmmm been done but i give credit for trying....
Watch me kill this dude excessively, like adding a's and o's at the 'end of words',
Watch my tender serve, your verse still stinks, even with mento's herbs,
^this second line is good the first line ssux and sux and then sux some more..
Think of it like this, even if I beat the shit out you, you still going to be guilty,
Won't get off easy in court, just like here, no need keep the murder clean, you already filthy,
^someone say stretched?......i can lost all meaning.....
Like 'Pisa', even if you were 'Big Ben' you couldn't re-bound from this,
You fell "short", now "stop", like R. Kelly's date, you left found in piss.
^hmm thats cold to R kelly....fine meta4...ok close...

Not a stunning battle but brethren takes it with a more veteran flow structure and grip on punches peace..............