I really like your style. everyone puts so much emphasis on exceeding internal rhyming and multies and sex with gophers and riding in golf carts so that you can be cooler than the kids with no format. but you kinda disrehard all of that and just flow on your own. I've always thought your bars were a bit long though.

As for the content....I was thinking "this is a stupid cheesy love piece. fucka love" and then I cought the ending. I was quite happy with that. You had a "pictures worth a thousand words" line. Everyone has those, shie away from them, cause you might bite without even knowing it. It's ridiculous. You had a fairly decent flow, and some nice wordplay in there. Your writers voice was pretty good too, if cheesy.

Good work =)

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