sylicon, you just need to elevate more, you came to simplistic with your drop, no real flow or complex punches and personals.....flash just outclassed you on this one, he had some decent punches better structure and flow...flash you need to use more personals as well though...all in all flash took this with a better all around verse but keep elevating you two..you'll both get there.

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