very good.

It has emotion, but not somthing that stands out in the piece, what does stand out however is, the conflict. Conflict, it seems that you really feel how the poem is written. Have you ever read my poem "Damien"? this poem reminds of my poem alot. The vocab is simple at times and complex at others. imagery wasnt abundant but still got pictures of what you were saying. the message seems to be deep, so in my opinion, the piece would have been better if you made it a couple of bars longer. i think alot of people could relate to the piece. Most people in their lives, at one point or another felt out of place, like they did something evil that wasnt them. I guess for you it just feels like that more of the time, but i can definetely relate because that how i feel all the time. I give my personalities names, Sleepy, is when im good, Damien is when i feel more evil, sinister, and like kicking peoples asses for no reason. good stuff here.

-Sleepy-

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