Skillz.. Other than barely any of it makin sense, ur verse was basic to the Nth degree.. if u dont understand the meanin of a word or the context in which it should be used.. DONT USE IT!!! Also.. u can make it flow nicer if, for instance, instead of writin "he will" u could put "he'll".. sounds more natural an its how most of us speak.. also u could try usin meta4s to create nice concepts for ya punches.. mc aines used them throughout an tho they werent brilliant they do help the reader visualize.. i hope u realise this is 'constructive' criticism.. i wouldnt have taken the time to write all this if i was jus cussin u.. keep elevatin tho kid.. the only way is up..

mc aines.. u did enuff to take this.. but not cos u murked him.. more cos he didnt drop a hard verse.. ur styles not bad but the lines are somewhat stretched an ur usin a few too many words so its kinda exhausted by the time u reach the punch.. also u shouldnt do a "like blah blah" meta every line.. shit jus gets borin.. plus unless its personal it looks fillerish.. jus work on shortenin ur lines to improve the flow an it'll improve u by loads..

VoTe = mc aines

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