I can tell this song had emotion
I liked this:
Quote:
into darkness I stare
there's a happy place, tho i'm sure where
i don't think anyone reely cares
watching my life go by
as i write this, i cry
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That was DOPE.....
This ain't no battle so I won't say
(Structure, lengthen etc)
It really don't apply here
If you got emotions built up just DROP EM
Tho I do think it would go together better if you added
a little more details to each line
It might KNOCK it out the park
Other than That I liked it
JamesJr.