That was funny LMAO
anyway this is just my honest opinion
It's decent... decent multies, decent flow...
What needs work structure, vocab, wordplay, etc, and try to stay on the topic,
By the end I was like wait.......
Might wanna check out this
to get a feel for more enlightened lines...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/forumdisplay.php?f=55
I went easy on em
JK
Gotta elevate
JamesJr.