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Old 02-05-04, 09:01 AM   #3
JamesJr.
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From: Youngstown Ohio
Lightbulb Dope Structure
IP:

Good structure, good flow, needs better multies and vocab.
After reading it twice, it did have really dope flow,(bounce) to it

Try making the multies, multi slyables
more complicated endings at each line




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