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Old 02-05-04, 09:04 AM   #2
JamesJr.
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From: Youngstown Ohio
Lightbulb Got Potential

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It was pretty basic (multies, plot, etc)
It did have good structure, try taking those // off the ends
put your thumb over the screen it's looks the same to your structure and looks better
for the person reading it
But yeah the Structure with out that// was NICE

Like I said needs wordplay, vocab. better multies
COULD BE DOPE !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


JamesJr.

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