^^lol... you didnt even read it im guessing...
thought this started off seeming a bit bland, but it picked up... but i thought the flow could have been better, in places it was hard to follow, but it had a nice turn towards the end, a bit sad tho...lol... and the perspective you came from carried the stroy well, yeah i liked it, maybe a bit long, if it was condenseda bit, might improve it, but i dunno.... nice...