Gonna give the flow to Illtallic...

Just read better for me, structure was better as well.

Some decent wordplay and a couple of good shots.
Nothing that had me going, "wow"...
But it didn't suck.
Points off for rhyming "departure" with..."depart ya"...
You can do better, man.
But thumbs up for "peasantry/beg"...nice wordplay, good punch...
And props to that "fathered" line, that wordplay was pretty good too.
Decent personals, nothing too exremely effective, but good shots at the avatar, itallics, etc.

Freeman was wittier with the wordplay, used some in almost every diss...
Flow was hampered by the format, but it's not like it was bad.
"Ghostwriter" was ok, played, but nicely flipped.
Same thing with "contraceptive pill"...
The "comedian" line...again, played, but ya managed to flip em and make em sound nice.

Really, for more creativity, and for better and wittier wordplay...

Freeman

But this was pretty close.

Peace

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