Word@that. I've replied to probably 17 dudes and i struggle to get replies too.
Anyway, the piece was cool. Some nice multis, but some i didn't feel. The rhyme scheme was still good overall. I thought it was a pretty good piece. The only advice i can say is to focus the topic more, but even as it is, its a pretty nice piece. Keep doing it.

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