skiddz... thought your verse started strongly, with a good smoothe scheme and nice approach to the topic, with well ordered vocab, in the right places, but thought that the scheme got a bit basic towards the middle for a couple of bars... then picked back up and ended it nicely.... all in all i liked the concept and thought it was executed pretty good...
N LitEnd... thought you had the better flow going, but the bad rhyme in the middle spoilt it for me... also your approach to the topic didnt sway me enought to give you the vote... i thought it was a little too short aswell, but still a good read and tight scheme.... but my vote goes=skiddz