Sureal-Your style was fairly simplistic...the lines were very short and straight to the point. There wasn't a large amount of imagery, and very little wordplay. There was a lot of emotion that shone through though. I noticed that you rhymed the exact same word a few times, which is awkward (held & withheld, be and be, etc). I enjoyed that you gave the whole scenario. Your writer's voice was a little on the weak side.

Evolve-Your flow confused me....at times it seemed flawless, and other times feeble and awkward. maybe it was just the way I read it. I really like the perspective, of the unborn child. It's a little common, but it was portrayed well. The idea of the abusive father/boyfriend is really played out. You had some nice multies, and your writer's voice was strong. I really really liked the ending...it's a strange to think that a miscarriage is the babies decision, but in this case it was cool.

v/evolve

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