V/ Ill

Both werent that great... DNU, your verse was just plain and basic...the punches u threw were weak and not hard hitting..they had played concepts and werent complex at all..your structure wasnt good either, with the flow being choppy and you writting it like a paragraph..do what ILL did and drop it like him. Ill, ya verse was much better then DNU, it still wasnt great though...ya structure was much better then DNU's..the way u formated it was good, but ya line length wasnt..ya lines are to long and they are whats called "stretched bars" cut them down alot, they are way to long.. your punches were just ok, more complex then DNU....but his did have no complexity at all. yours were still basic but they hit alittle harder then DNU's....and they werent as gay. both of u need to elevate extremely.....take a trip to wackness emergancy center and keep battling...read some Elevated Front Lines battles to see what ya shit could look like...once u get to that level check out the LLL battles...

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