this was a really played out storyline =(
your flow was choppy at parts, but your multies and internals were pretty well used.
you kept saying prettiest ugly...it was cool the first time.
like streaking in church.
you had some pretty good imagery.
overall, not a bad piece....the length wasn't necessary, most of this could have been said in half of what you had there.

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