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Flyweight
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IP:
This was a good piece, it was expression.
At first, when I seen the ends of the rhymes, (could still work on 'bigger' rhymes)
I thought they were kinda plain.
But as I read on, it was really worded dope! (vocab. and wordplay was there)
The structure was good, but could be improved a bit.
It wouldmake the flow it smoother.(extend each line maybe)
Overall like I said it was a good piece.
Keep updating it!
JamesJr.
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