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Experiments [undecided title] plz critique
IP:
this is somethin im workin on for my album, its hook isnt finished yet and I think im gonna add another verse to it.. anyways.. plz drop some feedback on this i would like to perfect this piece so it comes out nice
seemed I was a chemist mixin 2-ci wit ketamine as if possesed by a fiend
after the two convened I started to lean as a force intervened
i screamed then a feelin a bliss overwhelmed me as i no longer resist
I reminisced till the ground started to twist then turn to a mist
i told myself this didnt exist, so I tried to ride out this trip
took a whip it then told myself to sit but I missed and landed on my hip
then I began to slip out of reality and drifted into a new mentality
thought about spirituality and started to admire vitality
in all actuality this feeling was great the 2-ci got rid of the body weight
and the ketamine made it abate, this i could definately tolerate
I could create more and sell it door to door and let the users explore
I would probably be adored but this could start a whole new drug war
and I might be responsible for an overdose and some dude killing his horse
of course there would be remorse especially when I get knocked out by the task force
but I do endorse the source that provides these wonderful drugs
and to show my love I printed these pills with there mugs
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