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Flyweight
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IP:
This is just my opinion .....
Puertoricanelly verse 's
Flow (how many syllables in each line) was good,
No punches, no personals, (2 major determining factors)
basic multis, structure needs work , (hard to read)
vocab and word play need work
(work on these) just a suggestion
(punchlines , multis, wordplay, vocab, ) tune it up
(didn't really move me)
Brethren's verse:
had a few average punch/personal attempts
they were decent could be better...
(better than none )
Brethren's multies were a little better than P's
(more syllables)
flow was nice (and READABLE) structure was nice
(but could use some work,
(either extending, or placing comma's diff places)
Brethren's close wasn't that dope
but compare to P's "godbye" better
I got to give this to Brethren
JamesJr.
Tho the one before was kinda basic....
Negative points:
(structure, vocab, punchlines) tune em up
I see POTENTIAL in BOTH keep rapping , writing , freestyilng
(But iI have to say Brethren)
Brethren, dealt a harder blow being he has more experience that's the final reason why in my mind after reading both and compare all above^^^
But AGAIN
just looking out
JamesJr.
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