so here's the out look, ya'll just gonna keep sleepin and shit/
but see ya'll the dumb asses who still readin this shit/

Because of this line, I almost decided not to reply to this piece.

Anyway, you have some nice wordplay. You also had some weak/played wordplay. The flow was aight. The topic wasnt clear though. You should focus more on a specific topic next tim and cncentrate your energy. I see alot of potential, and the last line was hot. It was an ok piece. Keep writing.

Please drop feed on disappointment. The link is in my signature.